Melodrama. Melodrama and more melodrama. Purposefully awkward word choice (overuse of the word 'heart' in one stanza, I can't remember which right now, and overuse of word 'love' in the first line). Forced rhyme. I had a version that had some wonderful mysteriously-disappearing rhythm, but that disappeared after a rewrite.
Plus, darn it, I just say it's bad,t herefore it is!
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Date: 2001-09-28 02:37 pm (UTC)Plus, darn it, I just say it's bad,t herefore it is!